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I don’t want speak to you
I don’t want to understand
I don’t want to laugh with you
I don’t want to hold your hand

It’s just you and me in this room, alone
Gazes averted as the people disappear
Lost in themselves, lost in each other
I can only see you, and you see only them

I am absent from your mind
I’ve about had it; I think it’s time
I start to forget, I start to regret
And I slowly watch you dissolve

Because things aren’t the same anymore
Feelings change and we mature
And I was never a part of you
Just a part of me

The me you still refuse to see
©2006-2009 ~PurpleTallest
:iconpurpletallest:

Author's Comments

I've written a song. Big surprise, I know. This is about how I feel when I see the boy I'm currently attracted to. It's not even close to love; I'm well aware of that. However, sometimes I just need to vent through writing. Hence what you're about to see. Please be honest in your comments--I find critique more pleasing than mindless compliments.

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:iconflamorta:
Ah, the song is very well composed, I must admit. Yet the topic is very overused I may add, the crush that never notices you because they're too busy in their own little world. Though, overused topics can be good, especially if they help you get your raw feelings out on paper. Keep on writing, and keep on living. Again, good job. :D
:iconpurpletallest:
Thank you. (:

Yeah, it is overused, and I hate it that way. I know I'm in a bit of a different situation than most girls, but it's still the same. I'd like to write about more important things, but it's extremely difficult. That boy used to be my life, so I suppose it's easier for me to write about him. Luckily, he isn't anymore.

Thanks again. I wasn't expecting to get such a fast comment!

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this is our secret place [outer space, outer space]
:iconflamorta:
No no no, I completely understand. It's easiest and best to write about things you've got emotional contact with. It inspires you to write better because the situation is important and very strong in your mind.

And think nothing of the fast comment, I really like looking at the new deviations and clicking on the writings. I find more interesting things in the writing section.
:iconpurpletallest:
That's cool. Thanks for understanding. (:

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this is our secret place [outer space, outer space]
:iconzenirixwolf:
Nae, you know how low I am compared to your great literature so I can't really give a strong, sturdy critique and I apologize for that. It's is very beautiful and touching. Though overusing the word "I" is somewhat irratating to me, but that's only because I'm not a poet, it's that my skill in writing takes it's place in stories.

Other than that, it's really nice and I love how you use the method of rythm and then it slowly dissapears... yet sometimes still rhymes in your mind with the words: Meaning, you chose the right words at the right time. :heart: Good job!


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Just a bit explosive...
:iconflamorta:
No problem at all. ^^ Just keep on writing and have fun with it.
:iconpurpletallest:
I will. (:

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this is our secret place [outer space, outer space]
:iconsanoon:
I must say, this is a very well written and very well composed poem. You have great talent with this. Keep it up!

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